Editing Short Stories
Hello again! In this post, we'll be discussing tips on how to cut down the word count and edit your short stories. This is one of the key steps of the whole writing process, and something you'll definitely want to do prior to sending it off for competitions and publications.
Before I start, I'd like to credit an acquaintance of mine on NaNoWriMo YWP for coming up with a great chunk of these.
1. Cut down on passive voice.
Passive voice makes your writing stronger, and often allows you to cut down on a few words. Passive voice is where the subject of the sentence is the one being acted upon. Here's an example:
"the apple was cut by the girl" (passive voice) VS "the girl cut the apple" (active voice)
You just cut down two words! Although this might not seem like a lot in the grand scheme of things, it's these small edits that can slowly help you pull down your word count.
2. Eliminate Adverbs
I quite like adverbs myself, but when your trying to cut down on your wc this tip is particularly applicable. Adverbs are often the ones that end in "-ly", like "thoughtfully" or "horribly". Sometimes, removing them can also propel you to use better vocabulary. For instance,
"he walked slowly" (slowly being the adverb) VS "he trudged"
In this instance, the word "trudged" also just paints a better picture with the connotation and feeling of the word that "walked slowly" doesn't elicit.
3. Cut down on excessive dialogue tags.
This tip can also be very useful in editing novels or any form of prose really. The idea is that when you have the characters converse, you don't have to use a "he said" or "she mumbled" after every single piece of dialogue. Often times it is implied who is speaking, and a lot of that is also the various personalities injected into your characters' voices. This will also make the section flow better, and your reader won't notice a thing. Do be careful of going overboard with this though, as you do want a few dialogue tags every now and then as to not confuse the reader (which is where proofreading by trusted mentors and friends can be helpful).
4. Combine phrases.
You can utilize verbs with "-ing" to combine clauses or phrases. This sounds a tad complicated, but can be as simple as turning
"May huffed and crossed her arms" VS "May huffed, crossing her arms"
In this way, you eliminate one word "and". Again, this may seem very minor, but every bit counts sometimes.
5. Make use of Employ Strong Verbs
This was slightly touched on in adverbs, but leveling up your word choice can help make your writing more concise and push it to a higher level. Thesauri are amazing for this, but beware of totally bombarding your audience with caviar and escargot when all they wanted was a good burger.
6. Metaphors > Similes
...when it comes to word count, really. Metaphors compare things more directly whereas similes are slightly more wordy with "like"' and "as". For example,
"her hair bounced like flower petals on her shoulders" VS "petals of hair bounced on her shoulders"
Again, 2 word difference, but a difference nonetheless.
7. Contractions
This one feels a little more obvious, but you can consolidate two words like "do not" into "don't". Of course, this rule doesn't always apply, as there are times you may want to emphasize these words, which is more effective when separated into "do not" because it forces the reader to spend more time on the phrase.
8. Skip the Small Talk
Your audience doesn't really care for small talk if it doesn't contribute to the storyline, so take out length dialogue purely concerning the weather or introductions if it doesn't add to or further your story at all. 9. Onomatopoeia
This is helpful when you only have a few words to cut down, but don't go overboard with it. Rather than
"a gunshot rang out, and we all looked up in fear" VS "Bang! We looked up in fear"
Too much of this is going to sound juvenile, but in moderation it's fine.
10. Avoid Tangents
In short fiction, there's a lot of objects, characters, and scenes, you can describe in lengthy detail. This can be dangerous for two reasons. One, your story takes forever to get to the point. Two, readers quickly lose interest as a result of all this description that seemingly doesn't have a purpose (*cough wuthering cough heights*). Does the reader really need to know Ruby was named after her mom's favorite gemstone? Thus, try to only include the details that will progress the story, rather than pulling the reader away from the story and allowing them to lose interest.
11. Inferences
Inferences are a huge part of short stories as a whole, but you can also utilize them with smaller details. So, instead of saying
"Samuel refused, shaking his head" VS "Samuel shook his head"
Too much is of this is going to sound juvenile, but in moderation it's fine.
10. Vary Sentence Length
Try to ensure, when reading it over, that there is good amount of sentence length variation. Too little, and you could easily lose your reader in a chunk of long sentences or sound super choppy. This can pretty much be fixed by a read through aloud, because if the story flows right off the tongue chances are you have a good amount of variation in sentence length.
So, I hope these helped, and happy editing. If there's anything you think I might've missed, feel free to drop a comment down below and I'll add it to our list. :)
Too much is of this is going to sound juvenile, but in moderation it's fine.
10. Vary Sentence Length
Try to ensure, when reading it over, that there is good amount of sentence length variation. Too little, and you could easily lose your reader in a chunk of long sentences or sound super choppy. This can pretty much be fixed by a read through aloud, because if the story flows right off the tongue chances are you have a good amount of variation in sentence length.
So, I hope these helped, and happy editing. If there's anything you think I might've missed, feel free to drop a comment down below and I'll add it to our list. :)
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(Psst, 'lovely' isn't actually an adverb, just a sneaky adjective :))
ReplyDeleteReally helpful post, though!
Ooo, thank you so much for that catch! Will fix it right away :)
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